This is good stuff. As a result I have removed the book from Amazon and will take your points on board.
Although your comments about character development appear relevant, there is plot and setting later in the book. Not sure if you got past the prologue, which to be fair does not set the tone...
Putting aside the dos and fonts of soliciting marketing from this forum, the bit I read on Amazon seemed interesting. Certainly better than some of the other crap at the top of the charts through traditional publishing houses.
Their a hard bunch this lot, but they grow on you (like moss).
Contrary to most of the advice I have had on this forum, I have finally self published my first book; A Taste of Freedom (The Seven Souls Trilogy)
I now take a big step out into the unknown and make you, my learned friends aware of it.
Any constructive comments are gratefully received.
I think that the most important thing is to control the volume. Most current sites allow you to upload your own book without any real prior site history. Maybe a credit system based on reviews linked to how much text you can upload might work.
There should be an editorial review by some...
I draw using my iPad these days but also use pencil or pens sometimes.
Can't paint to save my life though. Everything goes wet and gooey!
Mainly draw fantasy art for my books but also have done some stuff for the house.
I find it relaxing unlike writing which can be much more stressful but...
There are some amazing artists on deviantart and a great critique system. Personally I prefer elfwood and have posted a couple of my distinctly amateur efforts there (incl my avatar to the left).
Do you have a website alucard? I'd love to see your work. (Promise I won't critique it!! Haha)